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New parents should attend parenting classes to learn how to bring up their children well. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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People who are becoming parents should attend parenting
classes
 to learn how to grow up their
children
 in a good way.As far as my opinion is concerned,I fully agreed with
this
 statement because growing up with
children
 is not easy and if we don'
t
 learn how to buy up our kids it will be one of the biggest disadvantages.
To begin
 with, I will discuss
this
.Nowadays as we all know that there are many bad things happening in the world, and if we don'
t
 grow up our kids well it will be bad for them in the future because if we don'
t
 teach them good and bad they will not learn from anyone and they will do anything they want in the universe.They will do friends with bad people and
then
 they will do drugs and other things.As we all know the ratio of drugs in youth is increasing day by day and no one is stopping
this
 because they can'
t
 do anything at the end youngster's life becomes hell and they do suicide because of depression, anxiety,etc.
On the other hand
, as I have told you
disadvantage
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 of not growing your child well and the solution is that parents should take
classes
 because in these
classes
 they will teach how to grow up your kids,how to tell them that thing is good and
that is
 bad,and they will teach you how to behave and
last
 but not the least they will tell you how to do friendship with your
children
.I think
this
 is best for new parents. To conclude in my essay I will say that, they should take these
classes
 to make their
children
 the best humans in the world
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