Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think is a positive or negative development

With the advancement of
technology
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routine become increased .In
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kept an eye on their physical fitness and mental
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which happen because of
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in my
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daily
use
of mobiles made
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influence on adult life So , mobiles are connected
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internet
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the internet
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and social websites due to
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improvement To illustrate,
this
case
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in many ways according to my knowledge .
Firstly
, internet updates come after every sec and
teenager
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teenagers
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spend long hours on that updates .
Secondly
, they make new friends on social apps and chat with them after every moment .likely,
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play
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sufficient
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role in
student
life because on
this
website they spend their
study
time on irrelevant video chat and sharing pictures .As well , lack of attention from parents on
study
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.they not
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criticize
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their children
on
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overuse
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the overuse
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of mobiles .
For instance
according to the report published by the " Times " about 90%
people
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of people
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use
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WhatsApp
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instagram
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and
snapchat
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in their
study
time . In my
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this
will
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negative
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impact on
student
life like
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physical
physicall
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physical
health
disturbed and
distraction
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distractions
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occur while
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.For
exlanation
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explanation
, if
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immmature
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immature
person
spend
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long hours on screen
then
they loss
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interest
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interset
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interest
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of
study
.They were not
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interested
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interested
in their
study
and
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result one day they will leave their
study
.
Furthermore
,
health
is damaged by
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of
such
devices because they
use
while they sit .Major
health
issues occur like back pain , headache and obesity.
Similarly
, in recent years covid 19 was a severe
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pandemic
and
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students
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not
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go to school and
they
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continue their online
study
.In online
study
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student
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students
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must miss their lectures because of distractions like
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the beep
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of notification .Chatting with friends
instead
of their online lectures
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to
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happen
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in
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in the year 2021 only 37%
student
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pass their 9th standard due to
overuse
of screen devices . In conclusion ,
technology
become
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after every day .
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why
,
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pupil
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pupils
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use
websites and
internet
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the internet
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for the purpose of enjoyment .While
,
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many
health
issues and lack of interest in
study
will grow up the drawbacks of
technology
for students
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