Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think is a positive or negative development

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, many pupils

use

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their smartphones in

daily

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routine become increased .In

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i

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kept an eye on their physical fitness and mental

imparient

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impairment

impatient

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overuse

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in my

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opinion

opinon

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opinion

daily

use

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of mobiles made

negative

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influence on adult life So , mobiles are connected

with

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to

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internet

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the internet

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and social websites due to

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technology

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technological

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improvement To illustrate,

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case

occur

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in many ways according to my knowledge .

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, internet updates come after every sec and

teenager

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teenagers

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spend long hours on that updates .

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, they make new friends on social apps and chat with them after every moment .likely,

facebook

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play

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sufficient

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role in

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life because on

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website they spend their

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time on irrelevant video chat and sharing pictures .As well , lack of attention from parents on

study

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matter

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.they not

critisize

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criticize

criticise

their children

on

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for

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overuse

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the overuse

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of mobiles .

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according to the report published by the " Times " about 90%

people

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of people

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use

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whatsapp

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WhatsApp

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facebook

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instagram

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and

snapchat

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in their

study

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time . In my

opinion

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this

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will

made

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negative

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impact on

student

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life like

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physical

physicall

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physical

health

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disturbed and

distraction

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occur while

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study

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studying

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.For

exlanation

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explanation

, if

a

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immmature

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immature

person

spend

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long hours on screen

then

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they loss

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interest

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interset

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interest

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of

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.They were not

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interested

intersted

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interested

in their

study

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and

a

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result one day they will leave their

study

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.

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,

health

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is damaged by

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overuse

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of

such

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devices because they

use

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while they sit .Major

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issues occur like back pain , headache and obesity.

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, in recent years covid 19 was a severe

panademic

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pandemic

and

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student

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students

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not

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did not

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go to school and

they

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apply

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continue their online

study

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.In online

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study

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,study

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student

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students

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must miss their lectures because of distractions like

beep

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the beep

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of notification .Chatting with friends

instead

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of their online lectures

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according

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to

survey

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a survey

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happen

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happened

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in

pakistan

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in the year 2021 only 37%

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student

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of student

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pass their 9th standard due to

overuse

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of screen devices . In conclusion ,

technology

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become

advance

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advanced

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after every day .

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That's

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Thats

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why

,

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pupil

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pupils

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use

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websites and

internet

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the internet

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for the purpose of enjoyment .While

,

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apply

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many

health

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issues and lack of interest in

study

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will grow up the drawbacks of

technology

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for students