Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problem does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local product?

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are investing
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amount
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of money
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their
products
to induce people to buy their manufactures. Against, there are local markets that are faced low budget
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leads to disruption in
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process.
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problems and some measures to address these problems.
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and foremost obstacle which is covered behind the trade
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policies
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polices
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is the vast opportunity for
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business
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to advertise and
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popular.
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to say, a tremendous danger is
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threatening
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threatening
the local market.
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, large companies usually convert their
products
into a brand and choose a catchy name.
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local
company
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companies
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with
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budget
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to indicate their
products
.
As a result
, they would experience less selling.
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, because of
high
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selling rate can offer
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competitive price. In
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indigenous factories should decrease the price just for a little profit. To recapitulate briefly, commercial or international
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ads seduce
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people to buy but other
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can’t afford that. Regarding some tackles, the contributing factors to
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selling
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rate of
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company
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consist of designing some plans and meeting
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needs of societies. To
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, making surveys to enhance awareness of the producers about the
products
that peoples need to prepare immediately.
Therefore
, nations can provide some plans and communities to transfer their ideas. To conclude, giant
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and large companies have been experiencing
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perfect selling because of that they invest money more and more
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. Among these
treatments
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local goods
has
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been faced a problem
such
as lack of investment and offering low prices and less profit. Ultimately
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designing
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plan
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and contributing people to local communities should be released these problems
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drastically
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