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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sports or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to be a good sport person or musician. Discuss both sites of views and give your opinion.

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It is widely argued that some individuals are talented in sports and
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 when they are born and some other is not, While it is sometimes believed that all children can learn to be professional in
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 and sport. The impending essay will discuss both sides and will illustrate a conclusion. There are many reasons why some are born with educated knowledge in specific talents
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 as becoming a singer or sporty man.
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 with, genius
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 in some children result in a significant improvement in their ability to learn fast or without learning to play all instruments of
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.
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 leads them to be professional in specific sports or playing instruments.
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, those who are born with
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 do not need to spend a vast amount of time attending educational programs.
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, the times has reported that Lionel Messi is a talented football player who spent just 4 years in Barcelona academic club to learn all his
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 and now he is one of the top paid players while other players spend half of their life just to enter in the well-known club to play for these teams.
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, there are those who suggested that any untalented person can be a musician or play well in all sports.
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, individuals can use opportunities to become
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, all these will contribute to a significant increase in the improvement of learning in any
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 leading to a dramatic help in increasing
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 knowledge.
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 has been evidenced by numerous studies the latest which is one published by the university of Toronto has concluded that over the past half-century, more than 95 per cent of singers have graduated from art universities in Canada compared to just 5 per cent talented who do not need to be practised by tutors. In conclusion, while some argue that every child can be learned to become a well-known singer or players.
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, most people believed that musicians and sporty people are born with talents.
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 essay provides that all children may have knowledge of any kind of
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 if they taught by professionals.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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