Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is very important to utilise
the
leisure Correct article usage
apply
time
for
teens. it is said by few individuals to youngsters to use their spare Change preposition
of
time
for society without any cost as it is advantageous for both. I completely agree with this
notion and discuss my opinion in forthcoming
paragraphs.
To commence with, Correct article usage
the forthcoming
teen
Correct your spelling
teenage
age
is the age
when someone choose
the best options for Change the verb form
chooses
further
life
. If they start doing volunteer work
in their free time
from this
age
they can get good motivation for their career. To illustrate, in
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apply
Denmark
government indulge school students to Change noun form
Denmark's
work
in public old age
houses so that they can learn from their life
experience
and focus on their Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
life
goals. It has been noticed by survey school teens who attend the non paid work
get more success in aims of their life
.
Moreover
, not even young adults but community
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the community
also
gets profit
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a profit
of
costless Change preposition
from
work
. When teenagers work
without taking money that results in saving of
finance and can be used for necessary purposes Change preposition
apply
for
example
health system. Add an article
the example
For instance
, in developed nation japan every school children have to work
in public
library Add an article
a public
the public
that
resulted in savings Correct pronoun usage
which
which
they use for enhancing the hospital facilities.
In conclusion, young teens should be motivated towards social Correct word choice
that
work
in their free time
to make them admirable for best
future Correct pronoun usage
their best
endeavors
and it Change the spelling
endeavours
also
leads to help
society in various ways.Change the verb form
helping
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite