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Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Addiction to drugs has increased at a fast pace in recent years. Many
people
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 are of the view that
drug
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addicts
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 are
criminals
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 and should be imprisoned.
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, few believe that they should be sent to hospitals and that proper treatment should be provided like normal patients.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views and opine on the fact that not all
drug
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addicts
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 are
criminals
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 and assistance should be granted in some cases. Nowadays, the youth has started taking cocaine, heroin and other types of drugs
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 of bad company, unemployment and high desires to fulfil. Not only
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 but, most
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addicts
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 are
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 getting involved in other types of crime including petty theft, assaulting women, abuse and much more. Society has a sense of fear of these
people
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 as they have built a bad image in their minds. Studies have shown that increase in the crime rate is the result of an increase in the volume of
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 dealers.
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, it becomes necessary for the authorities to punish these
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 and sent them to jail for the welfare of the general public.
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, we need to establish a fine line between
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 taking drugs and
criminals
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 in some places. There
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 exists a class of
addicts
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 who have indulged themselves in
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 activities
as a result
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 of loneliness, loss of their immediate families, unemployment etc., and become habitual to it as it helped them in releasing anxiety and stress in the
first
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 place. These
people
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 need help from our government by way of their proper treatment in hospitals like other patients so that they can get rid of
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 addiction and live their life in a normal manner. In the conclusion,
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 my opinion, not all
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addicts
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 are
criminals
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 and it is very important to understand the true identity of the person behind
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 habits. As treatment of every
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 addict into a better individual would contribute to the nation's growth.
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