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A Canadian friend recently sent you a present by post. You want to thank him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -say how you felt when you received the present -describe what you like about it -explain how you will use the present

#canadian #friend #post #-say #-describe #-explain
Dear Angela, I hope
this
 letter finds you in radiant health and you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to thank you and express my feelings about the gift that you sent me
last
 week. First and foremost, I was over the moon when I received the beautiful gift which is the iPhone 15 pro max. As you know I am a tech-lover and always try to use the latest gadgets like the iPhone.
Moreover
, it was my dream to have an iPhone as it is one of the renowned mobile brands in the world. I would like to describe some features of
this
 device that I like most.
Firstly
, the battery life of
this
 mobile is longer than any other device.
Secondly
, it is the best smartphone for music lovers as it provides large storage facilities which is expandable up to 1 TB.
Finally
,
this
 gadget is not only stylish but
also
 easy to use.
Furthermore
, I can use
this
 mobile as my daily driver for various reasons. Since I have to travel to different places frequently as a part of my job,
so
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the Google map of
this
 device will help a lot to locate the place where I want to go.
On the other hand
, I am able to track my physical workout by using the default app of
this
 gadget. Best wishes, Faisal
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear central idea and that the ideas are logically ordered throughout the letter.
task achievement
Always aim to fully expand on your ideas to directly address all parts of the prompt without digression.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices appropriately to help bind ideas and paragraphs together.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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