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Governments suits pain money on railways whether than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Over the past few years, governments have significantly invested their budget in railways in comparison with
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. I believe that
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 investment can be different from each country's perspective and I disagree with
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 statement.
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 with, there are many arguments in favour of developing railways which may have benefits for
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. It is clear, authorities are willing to improve
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 high-speed transportation system in order to reduce travelling time. As
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 development can increase
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's satisfaction, there are many reasons that show the government's budget should be invested in
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 transportation system. India,
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, should be considered a country where
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 requirement should be fulfilled.
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, due to developing technology, many countries have paid a lot of money to improve their railway system.
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 decision can have some benefits for
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 which cannot be denied. Reaching
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a destination by using a high-speed train can be an appropriate option for passengers.
On the other hand
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, there are many reasons that show the importance of
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 in citizen's life cannot be denied.
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, there is a numerous population travelling by road to reach their destinations.
people
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 who spend over two hours in a day,
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, can be mentioned in a group of
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 who require a well-design and well-constructed road to be satisfied. Another reason is many accidents which have occurred during these years should be considered as a crucial reason to improve
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 condition. Obviously, over a hundred individuals are killed in road accidents just on the Tehran-Qom highway.
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, in terms of social, investing money in
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 should be considered a vital requirement which should be paid attention to by decision-makers. In conclusion, from my point of view, improving all infrastructures should be assumed to
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significant country' need, while in some aspects governments can make a short-term and long-term plan to select their priority and
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 invest in different aspects of infrastructure.
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