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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 need to be shared in scientific research, economic and educational system, others have the opposite view that according to the worth of
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 can not be released freely. In
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 believe, if they have more
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,
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 errors would be reduced.
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, scientists, investors and academic staffs have a chance to predict
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 possibilities since they have as many details. In fact, the time that innovators spend on their innovation could be cut down because they have an idea about the previous mistakes.
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, they reckon
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 should be published without hiding.
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, it will help to update the knowledge . Especially,
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 who are in the science field, trading and education, need up-to-date knowledge to carry out their work. If they failed to refresh their brains, eventually, they will lose. In past,
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 did not have proper
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 sources when compared to the present. So,
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 have a good opportunity to be an expert in the relevant fields.
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should be brilliant in the trading market because it is the
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 business world.
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 should be opened to the public according to its valuation and speciality.
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people
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 do not want to do research or
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 just think about the
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 as a number or letters, the researchers spent their valuable time, money and energy carrying out research.
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, they believe it is better to think twice before enclosing the
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. In conclusion,
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 few drawbacks can be seen when
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 is openly publicised, I believe the merits outnumber the demerits since, minimize
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 errors and knowledge gain.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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