Some people say that the main purpose of television should be education, while other says it should be for entertainment only. Discuss both sides and give your opinions

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Owing to the burgeoning technology
people
are learning many things through
television
shows. It is believed by some
people
that
television
can enhance their
knowledge
whereas others believe it should be only for
entertainment
.
This
essay is going to discuss both the notions in the subsequent fragments, I personally support the former view. Irrefutably, the supporters who think
television
should be used for
entertainment
purpose
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purposes
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have
plethora
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a plethora
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of reasons to support it but the vital two are
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the problems as well as up to date with society. To commence with, the former view most
people
have hectic
schedule
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schedules
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and problems.
This
is because, they can
entertainment
by watching movies, listening
music
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to music
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and many more;
consequently
, they forget all
the
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worries.
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example
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if
people
had not interested in music,
then
they would have stressed
free
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a free
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lifestyle. Another reason is that,
people
who want to enhance their
knowledge
. They not only read newspapers but
also
people
can search on Google for up to date with
society
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activities.
Therefore
, leading they can enjoy their moments and
entertainment
.
However
, the opponents of
television
only for
entertainment
also
give a number of arguments against it like
enhance
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enhancing
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knowledge
and
learn
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learning
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new languages.
Firstly
, many
people
like to watch documentary
television
shows which are helping to grab
information
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the information
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of
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about
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overseas countries.
This
is the reason, children can improve general studies and they can easily understand studies without any issues.
For instance
, children learn
alphabet
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the alphabet
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through animation movies which will create more interest in children.
Secondly
,
people
can easily learn
new
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a new
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language
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languages
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and new
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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because they can
listen
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tolisten
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different kinds of language
podcast
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podcasts
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and they read
subtitle
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subtitles
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as well. Due to
this
,
people
learn new words, pronunciation and
sentences
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formation. Thereby,
people
have
numbers
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number
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of choices to increase
knowledge
. To recapitulate, many
people
think that
television
used
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is used
show examples
for
entertainment
, while
other
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others
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think
people
can get
knowledge
but if
people
watched research channels
then
they can enhance their
knowledge
and
entertainment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational content
  • Traditional learning
  • Remote areas
  • Underprivileged areas
  • Leisure
  • Diverse content
  • Dramas
  • Comedies
  • Escapism
  • Hybrid approach
  • Lifelong learning
  • Technological advancements
  • Promoting awareness
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