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Many people join distance-learning programmes and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #programmes #study #home #benefit #colleges #universities
Learning programmes, the main goal of these
programs
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are
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 to provide us
knowledge
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. There are two main
type
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 of learning
programme
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programmes
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,
long
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distance
 learning
programme
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programmes
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 and joining
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 and attending colleges or
universities
.
This
 community is divided into two groups of people
one
 that
think
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long
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distance
 program
to be
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 the best, and others who side with
universities
 and colleges.
This
 essay will discuss both of these views.
Knowledge
,
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 has been the
center
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 of all
kind
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kinds
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 of development, ideas and discovery. Without it, humans are no different
then
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 animals. There are various ways
one
 can learn new things.
One
 of them is
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long
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the long
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distance
 learning program, it does not matter
in
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which corner of the world you are in, you can learn new things without any difficulties. Internet and
broadbands
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broadband
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,
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 have made it even
more easy
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easier
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 for students to earn
knowledge
.
For example
:
student
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the student
a student
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 can directly connect with the professor if he is facing any issue. For that
its
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 not necessary for him to visit any college or university, he can be in any part of the world and can still clear his doubts. The traditional way of eating the fruit of
knowledge
 is, by visiting college or
universities
.
One
 can have all the facilities at hand, you want a book you can visit the library, you are stuck
at
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 a problem the professor will help you out, plus the environment makes learning more easy and
fun
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. Events and functions
helps
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 the students to release
the
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 stress so that they can focus on learning new things. As both of these ways have
there
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 positive
side
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, they
also
 have
there
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their
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 negative
side
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.
One
 can get all the luxuries and comfort from the
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long
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distance
 learning program
the
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 ease of learning from anywhere in the world, but it lacks to create that specific learning environment
that is
 only available in colleges or
universities
.
On the other hand
 college and
universities
, though they are the temple of
knowledge
 if
one
 misses a bus, or his vehicle is damaged he can not attend
the
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class and will fall behind. If we take
positives
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the positives
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 of both
then
perfect
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a perfect
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 education system can be created.
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