In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

These days
can be seen
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,
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the cultivation industry has developed,
however
many people around the
world
die because of being hungry.
This
essay mentioned some reasons and
also
recommended some solutions. Nowadays,
although
cultivation has experienced
wide
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wider
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progress rather than
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the past
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past
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the past
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,
this
progress belongs to some communities and in many parts of the
world
, agriculture
remained
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in the old way. In fact, these countries do not have the
technology
or infrastructure to do modern cultivation.
For example
, in Iran despite suitable land, people do not have modern tools or do not use modern method for agriculture, so the government need to import crops.
Additionally
, many parts of the country cannot afford to provide or import crops for their population.
For instance
, most African communities deal with being hungry.
This
is because the governments do not have enough budget to provide
food
.
On the other hand
, to prevent from hungry, developed regions should cooperate with each other and can help other countries.
In other words
, reaching society by giving money or
their
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sciences to poor society can improve the
food
problem in the
world
. To illustrate, Israel
help
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helped
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the UAE and
give
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them the
technology
to construct a building which can produce vegetables for all population of Dubai (which is located in the desert).
In addition
, the UNESCO institute collects money and provides
food
for poor nations in Africa and helps them to survive. In conclusion, in my opinion,
do
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not
have
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the
technology
or being poor can make people hungry.
Nevertheless
, the communities which are reached and have the
technology
, by cooperating with poor countries can solve the need for
food
around the
world
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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