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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Parents
 and their
children
 have an inseparable bond. At every stage of a
child
's age,
parents
 play a different role. When the
child
 grows older, the bond between them changes.
Parents
 become mentors, teachers and
friends
 of their kids. In
this
 essay, I shall discuss these different roles and their reasons in the following paragraphs. At the outset, when
children
 grow they want to become independent and want to take the important decision of their life on
its
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their
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 own. So here
parents
 should become their teachers to guide them without knowing them. In
this
 way, the youngster and
parents
 both would be happy.
For instance
, when I grew older I want to opt for a medical stream but my
parents
 guided me indirectly and told me to do some research about its long-term benefits before taking any decisions, so here they helped me without forcing me.
Hence
, the
parents
 should not force their
child
, and help them in making their decision.
Moreover
, at a certain age, mother and father should become
friends
 with their kids. Once they become good
friends
children
 will share their all secrets with their nurturers, so in
this
 way, they feel safe and relaxed about their kid's activities.
For example
, adolescence is an age when an adult needs someone with whom he or she can share their feelings. In fact, adults would not feel alone in their home and they
also
 feel supported all the time.
Thus
,
parents
 should not always be strict with their adult
children
. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that
parents
 should not behave as strict
parents
 with their adult
child
 and
instead
 have to become their
friends
 to provide them support and
also
, they should not force them on any decision.
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