At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In today’s world, the number of the younger population has increased when compared to the elders in some nations. There can be seen some benefits and drawbacks due to
this
trend. In
this
essay, I will analyse both aspects in order to formulate and explain my own. On the one hand, the highest working population is an asset to the nation.
This
is because
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the labour shortage is the biggest issue that the factories are facing. If they have more workers, they can boost their products and eventually
this
will help to raise the export income.
For instance
, most wealthy nations are recruiting foreign labours since lack of the manpower,
although
they have cutting-edge technology.
Consequently
,the active people are the real worth of the country.
On the other hand
, having a lack of experienced people in society is the main problem that the younger generation has to face.
In other words
, older people have different experiences than young adults. They know how to deal with issues according to their nature of them. In fact, the elders have the knowledge to predict the weather according to the patterns of stars, wind direction and season of the year.
Then
they have the various strategies
such
as the suitable date and seeds for cultivation, and how to manage remaining water for upcoming drought.
As a result
,
although
they do not have more physical power than the younger persons, their incredible knowledge is worth as same. In conclusion, according to the current situation,
although
having a good proportion of active individuals than non-actives is a reward to the country, past experienced knowledge
also
benefits as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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