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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
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I think there are two versions,
someone
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 can give the positive and negative person. Sometimes we will find
someone
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 to give the opinion if
someone
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 gives a negative version, it is making the
students
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 focus only on one part of the passion and
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 not making
someone
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 learn other
education
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 only by generally.
Then
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 if
someone
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 gives a positive version, it will learn and improve us to be multitasking people. But if we think from negative and positive opinions, we can take in the middle position if the
education
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 is important and it's needed to attend of the student, because
education
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 gives us enjoying and relaxing life in the world, we can’t reach our dream without the
education
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 because the success begins from dreams. we have to realize the reason why and what
someone
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 living for without the goal of dreaming. So I think we do not only need
education
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 for one subject. The importance of
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study
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 is we always learning all subjects that we need in our life. Because experience is the best
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 for
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 our process in the world, we do not stop learning the field of
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. All people had big dreams and many goals to reach it. Sometimes all
students
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 feel unwind to learn studying if the
education
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 makes us to thinks hard and difficult to understand it and sometimes the
students
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 feel enjoying when its easy lesson to learning them. I hope all
students
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 can decide to manage all their
education
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 and learn well without separating their field of
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. On another hand, Perhaps
someone
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 had a different skill that everyone can not do in all
field
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 of
study
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 so they may focus on one goal and what they do, and the
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 best
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 is motivated by
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 who is giving a support system and always praying to God. We can proud of ourselves, it's appearing for ourselves and motivation is the good willing from a deep heart.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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