Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

I think there are two versions,
someone
can give the positive and negative person. Sometimes we will find
someone
to give the opinion if
someone
gives a negative version, it is making the
students
focus only on one part of the passion and
that is
not making
someone
learn other
education
only by generally.
Then
if
someone
gives a positive version, it will learn and improve us to be multitasking people. But if we think from negative and positive opinions, we can take in the middle position if the
education
is important and it's needed to attend of the student, because
education
gives us enjoying and relaxing life in the world, we can’t reach our dream without the
education
because the success begins from dreams. we have to realize the reason why and what
someone
living for without the goal of dreaming. So I think we do not only need
education
for one subject. The importance of
the
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study
is we always learning all subjects that we need in our life. Because experience is the best
education
for
learn
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our process in the world, we do not stop learning the field of
study
. All people had big dreams and many goals to reach it. Sometimes all
students
feel unwind to learn studying if the
education
makes us to thinks hard and difficult to understand it and sometimes the
students
feel enjoying when its easy lesson to learning them. I hope all
students
can decide to manage all their
education
and learn well without separating their field of
study
. On another hand, Perhaps
someone
had a different skill that everyone can not do in all
field
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of
study
so they may focus on one goal and what they do, and the
last
best
education
is motivated by
someone
who is giving a support system and always praying to God. We can proud of ourselves, it's appearing for ourselves and motivation is the good willing from a deep heart.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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