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The number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island between 2010 and 2017.

#tourists #caribbean #island
The graph depicted the trend of tourists
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visiting
visting
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visiting
 the Caribbean
Island
 between 2010 and 2017. The
visitors
in
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 Caribbean
Island
 have the choices
whether
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 to stay
in
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on
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 the
island
 or on cruise ships. As shown in the graph, there were around 0.75 million
visitors
prefer
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preferred
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 to stay on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 than on
island
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the island
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at
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in
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 2010.
This
 number stays unchanged
to
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in
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 2011, while the
island
visitors's
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visitors
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having
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had
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 a slight rise
in
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of
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 0.25
point
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points
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. In the
next
 following two
years
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 the preference to stay on cruise ship keep increasing, but
this
 number
tend
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 to remain unchanged in the
next
 five years.
In contrast
, even though
visitors
live
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living
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 on
island
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the island
an island
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having
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had
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 a slight decrease
on
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in
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 2012, the
visitors
 keep growing from year to year, resulting
about
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in about
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 2 million
visitors
 in 2017. In summary, the total of Caribbean
Island
visitors
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constantly
contantly
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constantly
rocketing
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 within the seven years, with a big jump
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of
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pf
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of
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 0.7 million people from 2016 to 2017.
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