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Many masses believe that not enough of the Junk from home is recycled. They say that the only
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way to extend
reusing
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the reusing
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 process is for municipal authority
make
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to make
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 it a legal rule. I am
also
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same
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the same
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 mind and I will explicate
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some
sime
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some
 logical reason to support my point of view. To commence with the views of agreement, it is observed that some
people
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 do not accept that
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most of the waste from their house is reused because they do not have
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the
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 resources to reuse their waste products. They claim that government should make legal laws and it is very important because every
people
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 do their best after they have some
boundation
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foundation
. In a survey conducted by
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the World
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 health
organisation
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 it was found that every
people
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 do work after
have
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 some pressure. So
that
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,
authority
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authorities
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make
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makes
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 some fine rules
to
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for
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 those
people
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 who do not aware
from
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of
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recycling
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the recycling
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 process. Shifted
towards
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toward
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 the view of disagreement, It is
a
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the
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 responsibility of every citizen to keep their City clean and pollution free. So, they have to reuse the products and
do
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not
use
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 these items which cannot be reprocessed.
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, they have to
use
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 jute bags for shopping which can be used again and again and avoid the
use
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 of plastic bags. Even, plastic bags did not decompose after a century. That's why they have to
use
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 those items which
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are
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 easy to
recycled
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recycle
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. To conclude
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apply
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this
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, I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 with the given statement because every
people
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 have
their
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a
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 duty to manage
by
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apply
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environment
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environmental
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 problems and encourage
people
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 about
recycling
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the recycling
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 process.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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