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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that occupations
such
 as doctors and engineers play a vital role in our life.
Although
 some people think that working at the same part where they had the practice is unavoidable, others argue that vocations should be free to select the zone where they want to build their career. In the
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 I am going to discuss both sides and explain my own view that they have the right to choose.
Firstly
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 the same area from the beginning until the end of
professionals
' conduct is more convenient for all workers.
This
 is due to the difference between companies in terms of policies, payments and work patterns.
Secondly
,
for instance
, engineers in the city where I live are familiar with certain types of concrete buildings which consist of several blocks.
Therefore
, if they went to another country where houses are wood-based, they might find difficulties.
Finally
, to avoid
such
 unusual experiences
professionals
 should decide on their future before starting their training. In my view, these days,
professionals
 who move among plenty of nations, get the opportunity to enhance their income and develop their skills and knowledge as well.
This
 is because of the new situations they might encounter. To clarify, doctors may deal with diagnoses they never had the chance to treat before.
For example
, different types of allergies.
In contrast
, if
professionals
 were restricted to work within a limited region that might have negative results on society.
In addition
 to the disparity that would affect
professionals
 who have high ambition. Eventually,
Although
 pros of remaining in the same place where
professionals
 had their inter, I tend to support the other view that enforces the importance of letting people take a calculated risk and travel abroad.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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