Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. a) apologize for damaging the product b) explain what happened c) say how are you going to fix the issue
Dear Rahul,
Hi, Hope you are well. I'm extremely sorry for damaging the
laptop
that you gave me. I haven't forgotten the efforts you made to convince your parents of this
laptop
. I am taking full responsibility for all the damage and will surely cover all the required expenses to repair it.
I consider this
as my personal loss, as I could not take care of your device. Please accept my heartfelt apology, will you? I think the keyboard is the only part that is
damaged due to
coffee spillage and everything else is working completely fine.
This
incident took place when I was working on our combined school project. It was so stressful to find a solution to the errors that were popping up while
compiling our code. My mom suggested taking a coffee break in order to refresh my mind, but I had no time to spare from the project. My attempt to multitask led to this
disaster of your personal laptop
.
I have consulted with my uncle about potential expenses as he is an electrical technician. I'll visit his shop to replace the required parts tomorrow. And, will get back the laptop
by this
weekend.
Please do not worry about it! I'll make sure to return your belongings as it was sent to me.
Best wishes,
JalpaSubmitted by Vyom Trivedi on
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
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Task Achievement
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