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Before a lot of advantages, some people believe that the internet creates many problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this statement?

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Some
people
 believe that using
internet
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 may lead to a lot of
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difficulties
difficulities
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difficulties
instead
 of many advantages. I partially disagree about
this
 statement. Using
internet
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 is been increased these days and has a lot of benefits.
First
, communication ways are improving better than past.
As a result
,
people
 can connect to each other easily.
For example
, by using Whats Up App we can call online and see each other.
In addition
,
internet
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 helps us to do more research.
Internet
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 has a huge capacity for all
kind
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 of data. So,
person
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 who wants to find
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especial
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 information whit using
internet
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 could find it easy just
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one click at any search motors. As
internet
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 is so accessible and useful in our life, it is so hard to live whit out it.
In contrast
, some
people
 believe that using
internet
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 has some disadvantages. The drawbacks which they believe include as below. At
first
, using
internet
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without
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 any
aims
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,
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 would be a time consumer.
For instance
, many
people
 do not have enough knowledge to arrange their time correctly and
wasting
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.
Additionally
, using
internet
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 may be harmful for
young
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 generation. Youth do not have enough
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 themselves so, they
maybe
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 check inappropriate sites and some
kind
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 of
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 are increased.
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, pornography is common
as a result
 of using
internet
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. In
conclusions
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, some believe that using
internet
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 has drawbacks more than benefits but in my
opinion
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 the advantages are more than disadvantages and it would be hard for all to live without
internet
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