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It is argued that the parents of children who break the rules should be punished in some ways as parents are responsible for the children’s actions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#parents #children #rules #children’s #actions
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Nowadays, the crime rate among teenagers is increasing and people tend to blame
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 problem on
parents
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. In my opinion, disciplining only
parents
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 for their child's
misbehavior
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misbehaviour
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 is not very right because everyone must be responsible for their own
actions
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, including
children
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. On the one hand,
parents
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 are partly responsible for their
children
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’s mistakes.
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 is because
family
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the family
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 should be the
first
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 school of each person that nurtures and educates personality.
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,/
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 means that it is the responsibility of
parents
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 to teach their
children
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 that they must obey the
law
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, behave properly, and respect others around them.
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, when
children
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, especially adolescent
children
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, make mistakes or break the
law
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 affecting others’ property, their
family
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families
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 must compensate for all damages.
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,
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 is clearly stated in the
Law
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 on Marriage and Family of Vietnam.
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,
children
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 have to be held accountable/responsible for their wrongdoings. The main reason for
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 is each individual must get the blame for their own words and
actions
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.
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,
children
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, especially those who are in their adolescent years, have their own thoughts and opinions about what happens around them.
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, if their
actions
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 violate the
law
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, it is them that must take responsibility
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 of blaming their family.
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,
children
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 can be affected by other factors
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 as friends or the surrounding environment, which is beyond the control of the
parents
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.
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,
this
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 may not be the
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parents’
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parent's
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 fault. In conclusion, families should have partial responsibility for the wrong
actions
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 of their
children
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, but youngsters have to be accountable for their misconduct.
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