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average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

#carbon #dioxide #co #emissions #person #kindom #sweden
Carbon dioxide is a very toxic gas which causes global warming
world widely
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. There is a plot of
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CO2
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emission
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emissions
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 with respect to yearly of different countries. The graph
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 four types of countries which are including Portugal, Italy, Sweden and
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 Kingdom, respectively. The horizontal axis
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 the increasing year from 1967 to 2007
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 in metric tonnes. The results of the graph show
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 there is gradually increasing
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CO2
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emission
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 of Portugal and Italy. But
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 the end the
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CO2
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 of Sweden, there is gradually increasing first till 1977, after
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 the
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emission
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gradually in decreasing order.
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 of
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kingdom
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 there is a constant decrease
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CO 2
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CO2
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emissions
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 resulting
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good
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 for the weather changes. So, the results show that the United
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 has less
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 global warming as
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 to the other countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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