You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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A certain proportion of inhabitance opinion that all scientific testing on
animals
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individuals believe that very important discoveries can be made from
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people
have tended to new experiments and they hope to do modern things for society. In,
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peoples want to be globalization. So, They tended to new experiments. Because they used
animals
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happened in
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more virus treatments and it all
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developed
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animal experiments .So, some individuals believe
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are doing . Because they suppose,
Animals
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. They create
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value for
animals
.
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are doing picketing for animal justice
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worldwide
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world wide
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. Animal protecting
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believe
animals
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of nature and we should protect them. In conclusion, I think
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is two
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ideas are reasonable . in my view
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reasonable things for
animals
. And we should find
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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