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The preventing and reducing global environmental damage lies with politicians, as there are very little the individuals can do about this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Government can only handle ways to Control and decrease nation climatic loss
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 there is a small role for the people regarding
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 problem. My opinion is supportable by the given statement.Higher authorities can take care of these issues by banning products and
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 by increasing taxes on fuels.The essay below is going to explain how the leaders of a
country
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 play a very important role in saving the environment.
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 ,political party leaders should stop producing items which cause a lot of effects on nature the reason for
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 is product has more disadvantages than advantages
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 in 2018 Indian political party head banned the production of plastic bags and
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 started production of paper bags and reusable bags by
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 nature won't have that much loss.Higher up's of the respective
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 should be able to prevent the countries pollution.
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 to that, the ministries of a
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 should add extra rates petrol and other fuels which are used in own vehicles but doing
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 people will opt to use public transport to travel from home to work.For ,example according to research in 2020, Most people are comfortable with their own transport which has a lot of effect on air pollution.Raising the price of fuels not only helps the climate but
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 improves the nation's revenue on transport. In conclusion, higher position leaders have a lot of impact on the environmental losses and individual
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 has less to deal with
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 issue.Stopping the production of harmful items and raising the cost of the thing might help the
country
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's climate.
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