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Nowadays, it is becoming more popular to see animals to be kept in captivity, for instance, the zoo Do the advantage of keeping animal in the zoo outweight the disadvantage?

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Animals
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very
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indispensable
indespensible
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indispensable
 part of the environment. In
modern
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 era, keeping
animals
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 in the
zoo
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 for watching them is very common. There are many pros than cons of the
zoo
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 for
the
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humans and
animals
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 that will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with,
firstly
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, there are many
species
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 which can be preserved from
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extinction and zoos are the best place. It is noted by
survey
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since
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in
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last
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the last
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 50 years
100 plus
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species
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 have been saved due to preservation from the forest.
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, students or other people can gain knowledge about multifarious
animals
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 by
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visiting
visitng
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visiting
 just one place.
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, in the
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zoo
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 every
species
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 from each continent is present
such
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 as
kangroo
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kangaroo
kangaroos
 from
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Australia
Austrailia
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Australia
,
penguins
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and penguins
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 from
Atlantic
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the Atlantic
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.
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, pupils get
best
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 experience about them.
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, it is not hard for any creatures to live in
artificial
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an artificial
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 environment in which
animals
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 live. They live in controlled
habitat
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habitats
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 and eat just given food which
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effects
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effect
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affect
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 their life cycle and age. In India,
chattbir
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chatting
zoo
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 is the biggest
zoo
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 in the country and every year death of
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at least
atleast
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at least
 10 different
species
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 is recorded. In conclusion,
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
conservation
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the conservation
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 of
animals
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 are more since
rare
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the rare
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creature
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creatures
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 can be saved and information
of
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about
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 several
animals
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 can be taken.
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, drawbacks can not be neglected as
thier
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their
liives
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lives
 are compromised in the
human created
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 ambience.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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