Some people think that the increase in international travel has a negative impact on the environment and should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
While
some people
are of the opinion that travelling between different countries
has a detrimental effect on the planet, others suggest that it does better than harm. I tend to agree with the second group of individuals since economical
and cultural advantages have more weight in our Replace the word
economic
life
.
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
First,
I am going to review the economic aspect of travelling. Some of the countries
earn a lot of money because a tremendous part of their industries is busy in the tourism sector. Turkey is a good example of it. They have an infrastructure, people
have huge experience in this
and tourists are eager to visit the country and spend their money there. Also
, some countries
do not have heavy or light industries, but they have a good location, near the sea, that
is why tourism is their chance to fulfil the state budget. Correct pronoun usage
which
For instance
, Shri-Lanka invested a lot of resources into this
area and was quite successful in gaining decent revenue.
Secondly
, cultural aspects are crucial as well. When people
fly abroad, they become familiar with the traditions, local music, and food of their neighbours. As an example, I was surprised that the culture of Uzbekistan is so rich in terms of history, I think I become
a bit more knowledgeable after I spent my holiday in Wrong verb form
became
this
country. But it makes better not only local cultures but a global one as well. Music is a good example, where people
create hits using some traditional musical instruments.
In conclusion, travelling across various countries
makes us more wealthy and develops cultures. Both of these factors are playing
a valuable role in making our future Wrong verb form
play
more bright
.Correct word choice
brighter
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the issue and includes a thesis statement. Your conclusion should briefly summarize your main points and restate your position.
task response
You need to provide a more complete response to the task prompt. Make sure to address both the positive and negative impacts of international travel on the environment and present a balanced view.
