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artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity.some people think that artists should have total freedom to express any thoughts and ideas.ato what extent do you agree or disagree?

Art
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 helps an individual to express his feelings, thoughts and ideas. Whereas some
artists
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 around the globe have not
given
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 the appropriate
freedom
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 to express themselves.
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 blocking of
freedom
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 hampers the whole ideology of
art
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 and the true meaning behind it and I completely disagree with it. Countries like France, Italy and Spain who has
large
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 history of revolutions and wars. And to depict these iconic battles they had
artists
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 who expressed themselves freely and shared the war stories with
rest
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the rest
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 of the
world
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.
Artists
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 living in Europe
has
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 more
freedom
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 as they don't think that no
art
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 form is bad or questionable. Various
kind
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kinds
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 of music, dance and festivals are
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the outcome
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outcome
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 of
this
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freedom
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 allocated to
artists
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 which
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 not only gained active audience but
also
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 renowned recognition around the globe.
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,
Mona
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the Mona
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 Lisa painting which was painted during
World
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 War 2 is preserved by
French
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the French
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 government and has been
a
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one of the famous tourist attractions of the city
Paris
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of Paris
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.
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, the Taj Mahal of India
,
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 depicts the historic time
where
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 the Mughals ruled India. These all monuments and images are seen by the
world
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 because of the free creative space given to
artists
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. Today, it is hard for people to express their
art
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 form due to political and social
dilemma
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dilemmas
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. They can't express what they want as they might hurt some or the other society or culture. Asian continents contribute a lot to
total
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world
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 population and they
also
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 have many different cultural beliefs.
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,
a
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nude
painitings
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paintings
painting
 of
a
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apply
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men
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man
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 or
a
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women
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woman
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 can be displayed as a form of
art
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 in these countries as
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 is considered
as
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pornographic and can have
negative
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a negative
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 impact on children's
brain
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brains
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.
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, governments of these countries define what can be considered
as
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art
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 and what not.
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,
this
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lead
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 to
rebellious
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a rebellious
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 mindset in youngsters.
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, in my opinion, it is wrong to put boundaries
to
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 a creative mindset but to have a social-bodies
to
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check the created piece of
art
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 and validate
before
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it before
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 it is published to
whole
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the whole
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world
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.

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