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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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A portion of the general population believes that today's generation has a multitude of
choices
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement because there are a lot of options nowadays ranging from ordinary
things
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 to educational institutes. It is true that today’s world is full of various
choices
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 and they
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 have some impact on your life. These
choices
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 range from ordinary
things
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 like clothes, television
channels
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 and household items to important
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 as educational institutes, professional offices and relationships.
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, there are at least 120
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 on television today,
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 to
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 30 years back there were only 3
channels
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.
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, there are different services
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 as Netflix and Disney which provides
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 entertainment. Another example will be of different sources of information, there were only 2 sources of news back
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, radio and newspaper but nowadays people have several sources
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 as different newspapers, podcasts, videos and social media. So, the modern world has provided us with many alternatives. These several
choices
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 give us the freedom to choose the option tailored to our needs and
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 to ,
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 it
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saves
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 us from boredom.
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 their benefits, these options
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 contribute to some drawbacks.
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, so many options confuse us, it makes people procrastinate and waste valuable time.
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, people waste a lot of time surfing different
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.
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, they make us vulnerable to fraud because they provide several alternatives to a single product, most of which are cheap counterfeits. It is difficult to tell them apart and
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 it leads to monetary loss.
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 there are many
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 and even
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 copies of branded products available in local markets. In conclusion, I would like to say that even though different
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 enable us to be free and helps us choose custom institutes and
things
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, they have an overall disadvantage on society because they can confuse us and can make us susceptible to con-artists.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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