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In the last few decades there having more and more cases of famous people being hounded by the press. Some people think that famous people in the media has no right to privacy for step to what extent do you agree?

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Celebrities
 are
people
 who are known to nearly everybody living in a particular country or all around the world. Sometimes
celebrities
 are hounded by certain
media
 members and
this
 situation is considered to be normal by many
people
 who think that renowned
people
 must not have a right to privacy. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I am quite opposite of that view.
First
 of all, in today's modern times, we encounter
celebrities
such
 as actors, artists, musicians or social
media
 influencers in every possible
media
 tool.
This
 situation has a beneficial side for
celebrities
 meanwhile, there are
also
 some cases that must be considered as a risk.
For instance
, Turkish actor Arda Kural had mental health issues after being hounded by social
media
 comments and the fake news related to him. He was thought to be the most handsome artist in Turkey years ago, but after the detrimental gossip about him, he lost his beauty and was so close to losing his work.
On the other hand
, everyone has a right to protect their privacy whether they are a celebrity or a standard person.
People
 living today pay more attention to human honour than before and the topic of human rights is quite critical that every human being must be cautious. In case someone does not pay attention to
this
 issue, national and international law must step in and relieve the person who suffers from a breach of confidentiality. To conclude, some
celebrities
 suffer from being hounded by the
media
 members and a number of
people
 normalise
this
 issue. I am quite opposite of
this
 situation and anticipate all
people
 to be more sensitive to privacy.
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