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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that these days experience is the priority to get a well-paid job position, but at the same time, we can not underestimate the importance of awareness. At the outset, the workers need qualifications and awareness of skills
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 modern technological systems. There is a number of professions where knowledge plays a crucial role.
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, engineers, teachers, psychologists or doctors need both know-how and ability to be successful in their careers. Obviously, while certain types of expertise can be enquired during work experience, it is essential to get a standard education beforehand, especially for
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, as today’s world is effectively controlled by machines and all vital and crucial data is being stored on digital resources, it gives great opportunities to people to develop their skills in manipulating it. As we can see awareness plays a secondary role in skills and practice.
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, our modern world demands that companies and institutions have employees with very sophisticated abilities not just in technology but in dealing with modern systems and be flexible to changes, as we are living in the era of very fast-moving technological progress. As a consequence, frequently workers’ technological expertise often takes precedence over their basic education. What’s more, companies and organizations can not flourish without hiring workers with the necessary understanding. In conclusion, despite knowledge still being very important in modern workplaces, it is clear that the advantages of a greater emphasis on job background outweigh any disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valued
  • workplace
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • experience
  • knowledge
  • mentor
  • colleagues
  • innovation
  • stagnation
  • traditional methods
  • recent graduates
  • theoretical knowledge
  • diversity
  • viewpoints
  • proven ability
  • stability
  • industries
  • technology
  • adaptation
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