Many believe that being good at a sport is a result of talent while others think that it comes from hard work. Discuss both use and give your reason.

A plethora of
people
argue
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that
expert
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at
sport
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a sport
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is
a
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outcome
from
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of
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talent
,
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because they do not need to
hard
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work
in order to master
in
particular
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a particular
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sport
.
However
, some
people
assume that mastering
in
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certain
sport
need more effort and energy, due to the fact that all
of
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subjects
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should be done by hard
work
. Through
this
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I will discuss both views and give my opinion. on the one hand,
people
who have a
talent
or skill
they
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do not need
spending
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much energy
in
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mastering
certain
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the certain
a certain
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sport
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sports
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.
Therefore
, some individuals argue that
genetic
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from family contribute
in
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the developing
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developing
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development
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of children
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children
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children's
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talent
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talents
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.
For instance
, Cristiano
ronaldo's
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children have similar
skill
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skills
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in playing football
like
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to
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his father, because his father is
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a player
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player
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playing
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football
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in football
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, and he can give
good
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a good
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example
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examples
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how
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of how
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to play football properly to his children.
Hence
,
experting
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exporting
expecting
in some
sport
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sports
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people
only familiarize their
talent
every day.
on the other hand
,
people
assume that to master in certain
sport
need
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needs
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more effort, because they believe that all
of
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apply
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talent
or subject should be done by hard
work
. In
other word
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, nothing can be
gain
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without
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hard
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ward
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hard
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work
,
this
have
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has
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been proved by
success
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successful
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person with their
acievement
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achievement
achievements
in several events,
that is
because
people
train their skill every day to reach
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an
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in
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an
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expert
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an expert
the expert
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.
For example
, Kevin
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sanjaya
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sanjaya's
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success become
top
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the top
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atlet in the world because he
practice
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practices
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every
evey
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every
time, and he
spend
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spends
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much
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a lot of
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time
in
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the court of badminton. in
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conclusion
conlusion
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conclusion
, I believe that mastering in certain
sport
is
combination
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a combination
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between
talent
and hard
work
, because even though
people
have
talent
but they have no
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effort
efffort
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effort
for mastering it will be useless.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • innate talent
  • genetic advantages
  • physical abilities
  • reflexes
  • rigorous training
  • discipline
  • sports excellence
  • early exposure
  • quality coaching
  • nurturing talent
  • honing skills
  • mental toughness
  • psychological preparation
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