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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
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 of the most controversial issues today relates to whether newspapers will remain the most important source of
news
. From my perspective, I am convinced that
people
 should look for
news
on
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the
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cyberspace.
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One
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 the
one
 hand, newspapers will be limited the
news
people
 read.
People
 must have bought newspapers
with
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another prices
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. Of course, it can be not expensive. But take the example, on fashion magazine will be had
highly
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price
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.
On the other hand
,
people
 read
news
 on the Internet gadgets is
one
 more
significantly
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 than ever. It won’t be limited the
news
 for viewers.
People
 can search
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for somethings
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something
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somethings
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some things
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 they need. And it can be
bonus
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some
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 videos on the
news
 to readers easily imagined.
Last
 but not least, it can
be became
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 the modern lifestyle for
people
 in
4.0
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environmental
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 like today. In conclusion,
people
read
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news
 on
the
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smart devices is the best way.
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  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
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  • digital devices
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  • older generation
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