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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? *Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.*

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Nowadays
people
 are travelling all around the world
for
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 study or work. To do their daily chores, they need to interact with locals and
language
 can be one of the
barrier
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 while
communicating
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. And I agree that it can not only cause social problems but
also
 can lead to various real-time problems.
Firstly
, every country has
it's
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 own culture and languages. And for a democratic nation like India, the dialect and
language
changes
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 every 100
kilometers
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.
For example
, non-japanese
people
 living in Japan
has
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 to struggle a lot to even ask for a train ticket or to understand where to go to work.
Furthermore
,
countries
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 like China, Thailand,
or
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 South Korea citizens tend to speak their local
language
 to trade, commute and speak. They even have
sign boards
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 which
has
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 their native script which can be hard to understand for an outsider.
Therefore
,
people
 find it hard to survive and have discomforted experience
Secondly
, humans like to learn new things and try to make an effort to find
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survival in any situation. So before they plan their travel to any single
language
 speaking countries they try and learn some basic
words
 beforehand which can ease their experience. But sometimes it is hard to understand the grammar of any new
language
 because some
words
 might have 2 meanings associated
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 it and using that word in a wrong sentence can cause physical problems.
For example
, there are some
words
 in the
language
Hindi
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 which can be used for an animal as well as for a human being behaving like an animal.
However
,
the
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advance
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 technologies help
people
 to convey their thoughts but
its
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 not always 100% apt. To conclude, we can clearly say that surviving in
foreign
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 country
who
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 has only
local
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a local
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language
laguage
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language
 to talk
is
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 as difficult as walking for an infant. You not only have to learn new ways of speaking but acquire their cultural heritage and deliver the
words
 having equal value.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Communication barriers
  • Misunderstandings
  • Expressing needs
  • Emotions
  • Language proficiency
  • Integration
  • Local community
  • Culture
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