some people believe that advances in technology designed to reduce crime,such as closed circuit television systems,invade the personal privacy of innocent people.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,many countries are trying to reduce crime by applying some advanced technology,
however
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it would sometimes cause problems related to personal privacy.
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essay will argue why I completely disagree with
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idea. It is unquestionably intelligent to prevent some of the potential crimes by using some high-tech devices,
such
as circuit television systems, and tracking radar.Some people may complain that those actions may be a signal of invading individual rights,while I think it is sometimes unavoidable and overreacting indeed.For those officials,in order to prevent the ongoing crime or lessen the negative outcome of evidence,the cost of personal attribution is definitely needed and necessary.
For example
,we often see that in order to get potential crime arrested, police have to block certain tunnels which might pose an inconvenience to the commuter.So it is obviously not an invasion of personal privacy,but a way to benefit all the residents as a whole.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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