Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific

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It is argued that
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like to have
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in
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but at the same time a huge number of them see that
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is just for learning. I completely disagree with the
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opinion and think that
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is bigger than just learning. 
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of all, I believe that
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is a place to do a huge number of things not only for education. Even if some
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they doing their best to get a high score or whatever their
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goal, but they did not focus on their other side which is "joy", these
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won't keep working like they were used to doing, while equality between all our life part every day and every time will make as capable for more long term.
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, a lot of researchers found that studying for a long time without having a break like doing something to make you glad is a horrible idea for our brain. That's why schools need to be more entertaining for
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and teachers as well to be a successful environment. 
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,
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is our
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home, so having
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is important for our mental health.
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, we spend almost 8 hours in
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and if we will say we sleep for 8 hours that means a quarter of our day at
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, so how we can spend 8 hours without some cheerful
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, my youngest sister always tries to have
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as much as she can in
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, but
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she studies and focus on her lessons, and because of that her GPR is perfect all year.
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, the advantages of making the
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place to learn and have
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are the greatest thing for the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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