Some people believe that the difference between the lowest paid jobs and the highest paid jobs should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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No one can deny that in the capitalist era, everyone can earn limitless money regardless of their type of job. Many people think that the gap between the top and bottom salary among
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should be lessened. As far as I am concerned, it contributes to some problems
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as loss of labour in
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which require high quality and poverty so I totally with
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statement.
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, one of the possible problems is that many people would head to have less complicated
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such
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as a philosopher rather than most complex ones
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as a surgeon.
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the quality of education would
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and many faculty related to them would close as long as the demands for
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kinds of
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reduce.
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, reducing the income gap
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rapid emigration to other countries which provide well-paid
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. To illustrate, in turkey, many new graduated doctors have to work for hours and they get low pay in return for an outstanding effort.
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, another problem may be the rising poverty rate in the host country. Regardless of raising the lowest salary or cutting down on the highest one, putting into action a balanced-wage policy may lead to altering products’ prices completely by increasing inflation rates. Factory owners cannot meet the raw material needs owing to being overpriced so food shortage may seem
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nationwide.
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, in China, the government launch a balanced-wage campaign to increase vote rates. As a consequence of
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, people avoided tiring factory work and production slowed. To sum up,
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the shrinkage of the income gap sounds beneficial for each nation, it tried many times in different countries and
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notion collapsed. If the income pie is bigger, the smallest piece of it
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enough for the majority of the community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • equitable
  • living standards
  • disadvantaged individuals
  • social unrest
  • crime rates
  • wage disparities
  • supply and demand
  • high-skilled workers
  • incentivize
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