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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One of
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Carter
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's most important jobs is that of public relations director. The purpose of
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 job is to establish a good attitude toward his
country
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 among the public (
people
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) of the origin
country
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. As part of
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 job, he supervises the writing and distribution of
press
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 releases (
news
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 stories) for the
media
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.
Media
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 refers to all the ways of spreading
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,
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 as newspapers, radio, television, and other means of communication.
Media
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 is a plural word, meaning it refers to all these means. Radio is a medium of communication; it is one of the
media
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 used for advertising. Public relations
people
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 place special
news
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 stories in the
media
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 to help build
interest
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 in the destination
country
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. Advertisements in the
media
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, paid for by the tourism department,
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 help establish
interest
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. Employees in public relations and advertising must be fluent in English if they work in English-speaking countries. "To be fluent" means to speak, read, and write a language almost as well as the natives do.
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Carter
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staff
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 members write advertisements,
news
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 releases, and brochures to promote travel to their
country
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. They give lectures (talks) and show films about their
country
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 to groups of
people
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. They answer questions about travel to their
country
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.
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Carter
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 holds
press
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 conferences whenever something of importance or
interest
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 happens in his
country
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. A
press
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 conference is a meeting attended by reporters from newspapers, magazines, radio, or television. At a
press
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 conference, someone makes announcements that their readers, listeners, or viewers might find interesting. Whenever an important person from his
country
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 visits,
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Carter
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 holds a
press
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 conference to introduce that person to the representatives of the
media
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.
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news
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 items help to build
interest
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 in and knowledge about his
country
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.
Information
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 offices
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 give tourists and immigrants helpful
information
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. The clerks give them any necessary documents or visas that may be required for entrance. The
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 can
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 tell them about different laws and regulations in the destination
country
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.
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Carter
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 and his
staff
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also
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 work with businesses and industries that might be interested in either moving to or doing business with the destination
country
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.
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Carter's
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country
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 wants foreign industries to come and help build industry there. The
country
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 is
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 interested in exporting some of its products. In turn, the
country
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 is anxious to get the best prices on products imported from other countries. Wherever they go and whatever they do, the
information
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staff
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 members represent their
country
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. "We are the face of our
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 to the rest of the world,"
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Carter
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 says. "Before they know anything about our
country
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,
people
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 form their impressions and attitudes about it from the things we do and say."
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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