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Write about the following topic. Recently, abortion increases rapidly and becomes a controversial topic. Some people suppose that abortion should be legal while others are against it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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As a
people
 can not ignore what is happening in the world. There are a lot of problems or oppositions to different situations.
Abortion
 is one of them.
This
 situation brings with it different thoughts.
People
 support
abortion
 who prefer to live with freedom. According to these
people
 , every person can be free and they can do what they want to do. That's why they support it can be illegal.
On the other hand
, other
people
 support that
abortion
 should be legal.
Besides
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 they defend the opinion that it should be known by the government or hospital. It should register all
abortion
 records.
Otherwise
, the government will struggle with
this
 problem. At the same time during the
abortion
 women can die if their
abortion
 is illegal.
This
 is the most important thing about
this
 situation. According to my opinion, I am supporting all legal ways.
People
 should not do anything legally. Especially in
this
 situation. Because every health operation would be dangerous without less
equipment
. If
people
 go to the hospital for
an
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abortion
 there is a lot of
equipment
. But illegal ways can bring problems with
equipment
 or place. We can see a lot of examples around.
For instance
, one lady died who wanted to do abortions illegal ways because of lost blood. There was no
equipment
 where used for
abortion
 in the building.
As a result
,
people
's lives are really important.
Nonetheless
 all rules or laws for
people
. That's why, if everything it would be under the record, it would be followed by the government or hospitals.
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