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if a country is already rich, any additional economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Happiness
 is something that the majority of
people
 pursue in their lives, and the public
also
 often links
happiness
 with
wealth
.
Nonetheless
, some believe that when the level of wealthiness reaches a certain high threshold, additional profits of any kind have no effect on increasing the citizens'
happiness
. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement. While
money
 is of great importance in our life, it is not the sole concern. There are myriad aspects that human beings care about.
For example
, caring for offspring, or relationships with friends and families are two spheres that are commonly heard that
people
 value.
Furthermore
, cases of wealthy
people
 or entrepreneurs living alone and not satisfied with their lives are not unheard of, some of them even committed suicide even with all the
wealth
.
Therefore
, when the basic materialistic needs are met,
people
 will often shift their attention to other desires that
money
 is not able to provide.
On the other hand
, those who stand against
this
 argument claim that
money
 is the only priority in their lives and that the more
money
 they earn, the happier they will become. Admittedly, being able to purchase whatever one wants without having to consider the price is appealing;
however
, when one holds that kind of fortune, the value of everything becomes equal. The reason for one to feel it
this
 way now is that he or she has not achieved that magnitude of
wealth
 and that craving leads
people
 to perceive
money
 as the only target in life. In conclusion, various aspects of life are as equally vital as
money
,
such
 as the feeling of love or belonging, so when the desire for
wealth
 is fulfilled,
people
 will pursue
happiness
 in different other aspects, and the same goes for citizens in many countries.
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