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Some people believe that we have too many choices these days. To what extent to you agree or disagree? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choices
In today’s world, with the ignited of technology
people
 have a number of benefits. Even, some of them believe that they have a large number of
varities
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varieties
 to select
.
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 With the improvement of transportation and communication, I completely stand with
this
 view.
To begin
 with,
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compared
compaired
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compared
to the past, the transport system has improved in different aspects in present
such
 as ari
bses
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bases
buses
, mega ships and electric trains. So, most of the
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venders
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 import different items and food from other regions. In fact, in the UK,
people
 can experience over twenty types of mushrooms when they go to the supermarket. Some of them
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grew
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 in England while others were imported.
Consequently
,
people
 could have a chance to choose
to
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many selections with the development of transportation.
Furthermore
, Internet, social media platforms, telephone and television have
greater
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 impact on
people
’s selection. In
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simple words, they can search
any
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 product using their mobile phone or computer. Even, they have a chance to purchase items, which are far away from their places.
For example
,
in
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 present, the majority of
the
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people
 are doing online shopping since they have a vast
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variety
varity
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variety
 of
collection
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collections
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 for shopping. Particularly, market place on Facebook and online shopping sites are the best places to buy products.
As a result
, it is accepted that these days
people
 have too many
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choices
voices
 than the past. In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that some
people
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these days
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they
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they
 have more options to select because of the good transport system and globalization.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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