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In some countries and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing .what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

#countries #levels #health #fitness #measures
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These days,
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 and fitness
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 is the one
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that is
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 important because it illustrates the quality of life and life
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this
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problem
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 is increasing in many countries.
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 problems.
Health
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 problems have happened from the citizens do not have time to have
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 activities
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, the citizens are very busy with their work all day which is the reason that makes they do not have enough time to go to
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 activities.
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, fast foods which contain high-energy nutrients like lipids get more interesting because it is easy to reach and take
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people
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 have worse
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 and fitness than a generation ago.
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, the
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problem
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 can be solved by having
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 which is unnecessarily hard ,
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, jogging in a park for 15 minutes or doing some push-ups etc.
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 can make
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 healthier because the
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 adjusts the organs to a better state,
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 eat good foods which contain five food groups examine, proteins carbohydrates vitamins minerals and lipids in the appropriate quantity to make the body stronger and healthier . In conclusion,
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health
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 is one of the big problems that
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 must be aware of, which occurred in no time to get
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 and eat higher-energy foods than the body essential.To against
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,
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 should have exercised at least 3 times a week and select to eat food that has a nutrient which the body wanted to get out of the
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 and fitness
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.
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