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Weddings are getting bigger and more expensive. What is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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The essay seeks to examine the possible reasons behind
weddings
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 getting bigger and costlier these
days
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. In my view,
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 is a negative development as excessive spending on
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 events creates undue pressure on everyone else in society to do the same, despite their financial background. These
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weddings
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 are getting more lavish because of
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 discretionary spending ability of individuals.
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 is a result of the current economic boom which has led to
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an increase
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increase
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number
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a number
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 of
high paying
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 jobs. High economic growth in the past decade has thereby fuelled an
increase
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 in purchasing power of the average person. There has
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 been a modest
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 of women in the workforce, which has meant that both the bride and groom have more money available to spend on
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 events.
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, one of the drivers of an
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 in
number
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 of extravagant
weddings
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 is the broad
increase
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 in
ability
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the ability
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 to spend
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people
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 on
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 events. In the age of social
media
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, spending on
weddings
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 has become a display of one's status in society. While there were expensive
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 earlier, these
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 because of social
media
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 the demonstration effect of expensive
weddings
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 has multiplied. If someone's friend is extremely well off and has a very glitzy and lavish wedding, other
people
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 try to
increase
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 spending on their
weddings
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 to maintain their status within their social circle. Thereby, social
media
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 has indirectly led to a feedback loop where
people
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 spend more on their
weddings
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. In conclusion, the broad
increase
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 in societal wealth and increased penetration of social
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 has led to a feedback loop, where overall spending by couples these
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 has increased significantly.
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 is not good for society overall as
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 extravagant spending puts social pressure on
people
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 with weak financial backgrounds to do the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lavish
  • extravagant
  • nuptials
  • matrimony
  • social status
  • opulence
  • milestone
  • financial leverage
  • debt
  • peer pressure
  • consumerism
  • showcase event
  • ceremonial splendor
  • bridal extravaganza
  • market forces
  • commercialization
  • budgeting
  • social comparison
  • destinal wedding
  • event planning
  • wedding vendors
  • loan
  • prestige
  • economic impact
  • mandatory spending
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