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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and your opinion.

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In
this
 competitive world, many administrators believe that the most significant objective for
the nations progress
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the nation's progress
the progress of the nation
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 is
their
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its
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 economical growth.
However
, some individuals opine that the additional types of
progresses
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progress
signs of progress
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such
 as education and
green
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a green
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 environment are
also
 considered to be indispensable for the
countries
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country's
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 overall development. I personally believe that all different types of
progresses
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progress
signs of progress
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 are equally responsible for contributing
the
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to the
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countries
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country's
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 development.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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