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The key to solving the environmental problems is for the present generation to sacrifice their convenient lifestyle for the sake of future generations. Agree/disagree?

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The key to solving the environmental issue is not difficult. The people who are living in
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generation
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 should be willing to accept a less comfortable life for their children and grandchildren.
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 essay analyses the reasons why I agree with
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 an approach. The primary reason is that their sons and daughters would have an excess
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non-renewable
resource
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resources
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such
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 as oil, coal, and natural gas if they live a life
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 not very comfortable.
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, if the current
generation
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 opts to travel by public transport
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 of private cars,
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 there would be less utilization of fossil fuels, which would be helpful for the future
generation
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.
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,
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 pattern was not followed in the fast, which might be the reason we are facing a shortage of
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 resources. Another reason
,
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 is it would be a safe
place
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 to live, especially for millennials.
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 that if the current
generation
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 practices certain uncomfortable ways of living
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 as reusing, reducing and recycling,
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 it might alleviate pollution levels, leading to a clean atmosphere without many pollutants, resulting in a safer
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 to live.
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, the next
generation
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 would have fresh water, clean air, and a disease-free environment.
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, it is reported by environmentalists that having
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 pollution is always a safe
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 to reside. In conclusion, the reasons why I agree with the approach is that it would be an aid for the future
generation
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 to get access to non-renewable resources and it would
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 create a safe
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 to live.

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task response
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your position and provides a roadmap of the main points to be discussed in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases to create a more coherent and cohesive structure. Also, organize your ideas in a clear and logical manner.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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