The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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care system it's too hard to deal with these

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issues involved.

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problem is to introduce many physical and

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will be dramatically rising day by day because the new generation doesn't know what

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work in their body

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as mental

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will be damaged by eating junk foods. To explain, Nowadays many peoples will

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of homemade meals that are the reason

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is increased and fitness care systems

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an effort to deal with

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issues.

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, it will be a bad effect on their society and their children. In initial disagreement, The school's authority will be teaching their students to learn physical exercises but it will be not easy to handle.

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lessons will be useful for their learner's community and will benefit

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care system.

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-related topics in colleges and schools because it will be useful for obese people.

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education systems will be doing a good role in the community and students' life. In conclusion,

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will be a bad habit for all new individuals because it will reduce the over-looked faces of a normal age person.

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, The physical lessons will be encouraged to learn knowledge for the recruitment and it will be beneficial in future.