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Some People Believe That Children Should Not Be Given Homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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For decades, schools have included
homework
 in their curricula, which has replaced other activities while allowing
students
 to improve their knowledge. Some people argue that giving children free time rather than giving them
homework
 is better, while some think
otherwise
.
This
 essay discusses both opinions and gives the author's opinion before the conclusion is reached. In today's society, where competition for jobs is very high and successes are seen as correlated to academic results, parents put pressure on children to do better in their studies.
Therefore
, they believe that
homework
 is essential for kids to practice and get good scores on their exams. Take-home exercises
also
 encourage learners to get hands-on experience since sometimes they only learn about theories, which is not enough for them to understand the materials.
Furthermore
,
homework
 distracted kids from gaming, which is seen as a bad influence on young kids.
On the other hand
, people believe that after school
students
 should have their free time to do other activities that they like,
such
 as sports, arts and crafts, etc. Sometimes, teachers will give out
homework
 that takes up most of the
students
' time already. Too much
homework
 can
also
 lead to too much stress in adolescence and can affect them in the long term. In my opinion, I think that
homework
 can be given out but should be just the right amount so that it is not overwhelming for the
students
. The amount should just be enough for them to recap what they have learnt in the class and still allow them to do their hobbies. In conclusion,
homework
 has its positives and negatives and depending on the school's regulations, it can be beneficial or harm the one that received it.
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