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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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A particular proportion of the community considers that matrimonial
age
 should be above 21. I partially support
this
 viewpoint, and my arguments will be elaborated in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, even though governments permit marriage to
people
 who have reached the legal
age
 of 18 it is not enough to comprehend and appreciate the value of a long-lasting relationship. To be more specific, the legal
age
 of 18 may be enough to opt for an individual's way of
life
such
 as career, university major, and hobbies
whereas
 it should not include the indispensable subject like marriage.
Secondly
,
people
 can easily break up and end their relationship because of choosing the wrong
person
 if they are not mature enough.
For instance
,
people
 who marry under 21 fall in love with the
person
 whom they met first time and share the same interests as the opposite gender
as well as
 regard that
person
 as their soulmate and break up after a few times.
On the other hand
,
people
 and their viewpoints do not match with their ages every time. To give an example, each
person
 has a distinct past and experiences, and that makes
people
 distinguishable. The
person
 who suffered and reached comfort and wealth is disparate from someone who lived in opulence for his whole
life
. The second point is that
people
 sometimes meet with their soulmates at an early
age
 and start to build their
life
 together
furthermore
 grow together. In conclusion,
albeit
Correct word choice
although
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 I believe that a whole
life
 relationship is so serious matter and requires a lot of maturity, I
also
 hold the view that each
person
 grows and becomes mature in different
life
 periods.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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