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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #members #students
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contemporary
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 epoch,
equalities
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equality
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 issues
has
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 been
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a controversy
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 for a long time, in
collages
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colleges
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, it is figured that the chefs should accept
this
 quality in all
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 sectors irrespective what is the
gender
is
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. I subscribe to the notion that
this
 law can be feasible and I shall discuss
impact
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of
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equalities
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on
course
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the course
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 of action of institutes and analyse if
this
 issue is destroying the
principals
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. To commence with, team working
that is
 mixed by both genders plays a crucial role in practically
of
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education systems.
First
 and foremost,
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 have mutual effects on each other’s creativity and
hard
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hard-working
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working
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 or else and on in
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 they intense their capability.
Additionally
, the fills of abilities may
gape
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 by their
gender
 associations.
Secondly
,
latent
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the latent
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 sophistication of each
gender
 help to enhance science. To exemplify, it has proved that men are better at single task ordinated and women are better at analysing and multitasking works. As
result
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 these facts create a window of opportunity for science.
On the other hand
, adhering to some projects may have
some
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apply
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harmful effects on women. To illustrate, in civil engineering assessments
has
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have
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 been observed, physical
works
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work
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 and overwhelming actions. In
such
 scenarios,
administration
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the administration
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 cannot consider women and men
same
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the same
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. To recapitulate briefly, in some parts there is an inevitable choice to separate them
in
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vary
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very
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 tasks. To conclude, I do tend to agree with
gender
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the gender
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 equality phenomenon in science activities.
Although
, there are cases that we cannot consider
them
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 same and there is no room for doubt that conducting equalities will show us
charming
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a charming
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 horizon.
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