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last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

#week #flight #london #plane #bag #hotel #airline #contents #addresses
Dear Sir, I am writing to you with
a regards
Correct the article-noun agreement
regard
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 to a
bag
 I forgot on the plane
last
 week, on Flight R223 which went to London from Belgium on the 2nd of January. Let me explain my situation, I was seated on F21, a window seat. When the plane landed, I tried to get to the clearance area as soon as possible because I had a late appointment I needed to meet up on. When I
had come
Wrong verb form
came
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 back to my Hotel I realised I did not have my
bag
. The
bag
 is blue, with a black strap and a silver inscription of my initial JJ on its top left corner. Included in the
bag
 is a picture book, a bunch of keys, and a digital camera,
leica
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Leica
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 to be precise, it
also
 has two memory card disks. I would like for you to confirm if the
bag
 was discovered
in
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by
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 the airline,
furthermore
Add a comma
furthermore,
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 can I get
a detailed information
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detailed information
a piece of detailed information
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 on how to claim a lost item from your airline
.
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?
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 I look forward to hearing from you.
Your
Correct the word
Yours
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 Faithfully James Jones.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The logical structure is good, but make sure each paragraph contains one main idea.
task achievement
As per the task response, while the candidate addressed all parts of the task, more details could be provided, such as the flight date and seat number in a more detailed context.
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