In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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Urban designers are increasingly planning to change the traditional form of many cities. In my point of view, the drawbacks of

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trend outweigh the benefits and I will discuss my opinion in

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essay. There are various reasons why re-creating urban areas is far more disadvantageous.

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with, long distances between the workplace and home would cause heavy traffic

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which may lead to air and noise pollution.

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, in Tehran, many commuters or students who live in suburbs away from the city centre which includes offices and schools should spend hours on the roads in their cars or taxis during rush hours.

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lead to more dependence on travelling by vehicles and motorcycles.

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, most parents prefer to be close to their children's schools as they might get injured during sports classes or perhaps become sick. In the same way, hospitals should not be too far away from schools, offices, and residential areas in case of an emergency.

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, attracting customers to shopping malls that are away from the living environment can be unmanageable for store owners.

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, most Iranian dwellers choose to buy their necessities from local shops rather than from large centres which makes them spend a lot of time on the way to reach them. In conclusion,

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some planners tend to distinguish apartment buildings, educational institutions, stores, and

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to reconstruct many cities, I believe that the potential negative consequences of

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new planning method are undeniable.

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Ensure that all aspects of the prompt are addressed in the essay. Think about how you can provide a more balanced view by discussing potential advantages of the urban planning strategy as well.

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Clear introduction and conclusion

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Strong examples to support main points

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Segregation
Urban areas
Residential
Commercial
Industrial
Systematic development
Amenity provision
Urban management
Pollution
Quality of life
Transportation costs
Environmental impact
Social segregation
Amenities
Services
Income neighborhoods
Vibrant
Accessible
Travel times
Social interaction
Mixed-use developments
Sustainable urban planning
Walking
Cycling
Public transport
Urban sprawl
Green spaces
Agricultural land
Biodiversity
Business hubs
Investments
Employment opportunities
Economic growth

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In many cities, planners tend to arrange shops, schools, offices, and homes in specific areas and separate them from each other. Do you think the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed?

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

more and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in foreign country. do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?